I think the first paragraph is lovely and we shall keep it as it is, to avoid extra iterations.
I don't wholeheartedly agree with the rewrite of the 2nd paragraph: the points about pd being free and being available in source are missing now, as well as a the point that pd-extended is more than vanilla+externals but it's also patched. Also, afaik, vanilla is not "written by" Miller but rather "maintained" by him as it contains code from various authors. So, at the end, I personally prefer how this paragraphed looked before the last commit.
All this work being quite subjective (as it is free text not program code) *please* give some reasons/rationale when you make change changes: why did you do what you did, what is the improvement? Otherwise we might just keep changing until the end of times :o)
I don't think we need the extra paragraph about graphical programming, but a picture of an actual patch would tell a lot (without words).
I don't support mixing the 3rd and the 4th paragraph either - they are two different points (extendability, history).

András


On Wed, Jan 23, 2013 at 6:05 PM, Hans-Christoph Steiner <hans@at.or.at> wrote:

Sounds good, I say push the updates to the site! :)

.hc

On 01/23/2013 06:04 AM, Nicolas Montgermont wrote:
> cool,
>
> I've rewritten the second paragraph as well.
> English should be checked...
> I think we miss a simple paragraph between 1st and 2nd on what is graphical programming.
> And we need to rewrite the actual 3th and 4th in one.
> The fifth could be extended with a little introduction on what are the sections of this site.
>
> best,
> n
>
>
>
>
>
> ________________________________
>  De : Marco Donnarumma <devel@thesaddj.com>
> Ŕ : András Murányi <muranyia@gmail.com>
> Cc : "pdweb@iem.at" <pdweb@iem.at>
> Envoyé le : Mercredi 23 janvier 2013 3h03
> Objet : Re: [Pdweb] front page text (was: rename "download Pd" to "Downloads")
>
>
> feels good for me!
>
>
>
> --
> Marco Donnarumma
> New Media + Sonic Arts Practitioner, Performer, Teacher, Director.
> Embodied Audio-Visual Interaction Research Team.
> Department of Computing, Goldsmiths University of London
> ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
> Portfolio: http://marcodonnarumma.com
> Research: http://res.marcodonnarumma.com
> Director: http://www.liveperformersmeeting.net
>
>
> On Tue, Jan 22, 2013 at 5:21 PM, András Murányi <muranyia@gmail.com> wrote:
>
> I've made an update to the text. Deleted repetitions (eg.: multiplatform), the "ideal tool" expression (let's keep it cool :o) and moved the remark about learning back to the end. I'm happy with the other changes that have been made, so when you guys feel the same, we may want to move towards publishing.
>>
>> András
>>
>>
>>
>> On Sat, Dec 1, 2012 at 1:06 PM, Marco Donnarumma <devel@thesaddj.com> wrote:
>>
>> looks good thanks!
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> --
>>> Marco Donnarumma
>>> New Media + Sonic Arts Practitioner, Performer, Teacher, Director.
>>> Embodied Audio-Visual Interaction Research Team.
>>> Department of Computing, Goldsmiths University of London
>>> ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
>>> Portfolio: http://marcodonnarumma.com
>>> Research: http://res.marcodonnarumma.com
>>> Director: http://www.liveperformersmeeting.net
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On Sat, Dec 1, 2012 at 2:50 AM, Hans-Christoph Steiner <hans@at.or.at> wrote:
>>>
>>>
>>>>
>>>> This is looking much better, here's my quick edit:
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> Pure Data (aka Pd) is an open source visual programming language. Pd enables musicians, visual artists, performers, researchers, and  developers to graphically create software. It is an ideal tool for those who wish to learn how to process data from a varied range of media without writing lines and lines of text. Pd is used to process and generate sound, video, 2D/3D graphics, sensor data, input devices, MIDI and more. Pd can easily work over local and remote networks so to integrate wearable technology, motor systems, lighting rigs, and other equipment. Pd is fully cross-platform, it is used to realize interactive artworks on desktop and mobile, as well as to handle complex networked systems for large-scale projects.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> .hc
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> On Nov 30, 2012, at 5:24 AM, Marco Donnarumma wrote:
>>>>
>>>> cool, thanks Nicolas.
>>>>> I just reworded and added a few keywords here and there. You can see it on the pad, meanwhile, what about it:
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> Pure Data(aka Pd) is an open source visual programming language. Pd enables musicians, visual artists, performers, researchers,and  developers to graphically create software. It is an ideal tool for those who wish to learn how to process data
> from a varied range of media without writing strings of code. Pd
> software is used toprocess andgenerate  sound, video,2D/3D graphics,andinterfacesensors, input devices,  and MIDI. Pd can easily work over locale and remotenetworksso tointegrate wearable technology,motorsystems, lighting rigs, and other equipment. Pd is fully cross-platform, it is used to realise interactive artworks
> on laptop and smartphones, as well as to handle complex networked
> systems for large-scale projects.
>>>>>
>>>>> cheers,
>>>>>
>>>>> --
>>>>> Marco Donnarumma
>>>>> New Media + Sonic Arts Practitioner, Performer, Teacher, Director.
>>>>> Embodied Audio-Visual Interaction Research Team.
>>>>> Department of Computing, Goldsmiths University of London
>>>>> ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
>>>>> Portfolio: http://marcodonnarumma.com
>>>>> Research: http://res.marcodonnarumma.com
>>>>> Director: http://www.liveperformersmeeting.net
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> On Thu, Nov 29, 2012 at 5:04 PM, Nicolas Montgermont <nicolas_montgermont@yahoo.fr> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>> Sorry for the french interface,
>>>>>> I thought it was localized...
>>>>>> I've moved everything on an english piratepad:
>>>>>> http://piratepad.net/pPEAhgQS00
>>>>>>
>>>>>> so let's forget about framapad and use this one instead.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> best,
>>>>>> n
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> ________________________________
>>>>>> De : András Murányi <muranyia@gmail.com>
>>>>>> Ŕ : pdweb@iem.at
>>>>>> Envoyé le : Jeudi 29 novembre 2012 14h47
>>>>>> Objet : Re: [Pdweb] front page text (was: rename "download Pd" to "Downloads")
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> On Thu, Nov 29, 2012 at 12:02 PM, Marco Donnarumma <devel@thesaddj.com> wrote:
>>>>>>
>>>>>> hey folks, where can i add my edits?
>>>>>>>
>>>>>>>
>>>>>> Just go to http://lite.framapad.org/p/HtIWJQZv7m and edit away...
>>>>>> You can set your nick clicking on the avatar (top right corner).
>>>>>> It will automatically set a unique color for you, and the clock icon lets you see previous revisions. (BTW what does the star icon do?)
>>>>>>
>>>>>> András
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> _______________________________________________